The meetings hadn't been as frequent in the past couple of years, since John, an archeologist, was away often for months at a time at some dig or another, but Giles came every month, whether John did or not.

See how adding the but makes the sentences -- and the thought -- flow together? The choppiness particularly stands out the longer a paragraph is, like beginning part 1 and part three.

You've got Giles's voice nicely, and John also has a distinctive voice in my head, which is a good sign. But he does take on serious tones of Buffy occasionally, particularly during the ritual. Goes from being British to American and young with it. Might want to watch that. <g>

It's a cool story with some good descriptions, but there didn't really seem to be much of a point to it. No lessons learned, no character development, nothing like that. We get Giles feeling guilty about causing trouble, but only at one point. You might want to add something to the end, some dialogue about... oh, not mucking around when you don't have all of the details (which would explain a lot about Giles' current *obsession* with details), that kind of thing.

ROTFLMAO!!! This is a great crack, and exceptionally Gilesey.

cap The World, like before.

Reddily is not a word. The only light came from the embers, growing red.

The world had shifted its attention away from them.

cap The World again; it's a nice touch, but it needs to be consistent.